phosphorusprocedure's audio Reviews on Newgrounds

[Deus Ex - Unatco (remix)]

Hmm. I was kinda ambivalent about the instrument you used at the beginning. The orchestra BWOOOM sounded really cool though. I really enjoyed what you did with the strings in the 2nd half, I just think they were a bit loud. I kinda lost track of what the theme originally was with all this other stuff going on. I noticed as of now you have only 3 audio submissions, all remixes. Do you do original music too? I'd like to hear some of that.

neyus99 responds:

Thanks for listening! Yea the second half pretty much becomes something else. Like I would be building the song around the original melody with different sound and thats what it turned out in the end.

I do have originals, in fact I'm working on a EP with 4 or 5 track. It will be electronic/dance, greatly influenced by BT and Solar Field. Aside from that I've recently stopped trying to make remixes, instead just going to concentrate on originals.

So more to come in time.

[Wolfie - Journey]

I really like the jingly things at the beginning. The synth playing the chords sounds real nice. The drums work well with the track. I'm not an expert on rap, so I don't know how to critique your rapping. I can say it's definitely NOT buried. Good mixing. By "A Horse With No Name" do you mean the song by America? I never heard it; I just googled it and it came up. Might be interesting to listen to. Nice work - cheers!

Wolfie responds:

Thanks for checking this out!

I'm glad you like the production. And about the rapping, I agree with others, that I could use work. So I went ahead and re-recorded this (and the rest of my songs). I'll be re-uploading them over the weekend, for sure. I find them to be an improvement. And yes, that's the song I was referring to. I thought it was a good song, and I liked the lyrics, so I kinda used some lines in my verse. It's a nice song, I think you might like it.

Thanks for the review!

[The Portraits]

This is great. It reminds me of the hospital in Super Meat Boy, without all the crazy percussion cluttering up the clever melodies. Not that crazy percussion's a bad thing. I like the discordant harmony at in the middle of the loop. I also really like what's going on at 1:12. Your sense of harmony is impressive. And it definitely matches the short story. Nicely done.

S3C responds:

Thanks bro. Super Meat Boy eh? Can't say I remember the hospital level. Maybe I never got that far.

[Circus (Instr)]

Dude, that melody's gonna give me nightmares. It doesn't help I'm typing this review alone in a dark house right now. Kidding. I felt the clap wasn't quite balanced with the kick, and if it was a touch louder, I could nod my head instead of almost nodding it and then getting confused for a second thinking the clap is a hat every single bar. Hats sounded good. The cool little synth siren thingy at 2:11 ish sounded cool. I'd say experiment with adding things to the beat so the listener doesn't get bored. I mean, I'm kinda bored by this, but you could fix that with a) a rapper, or b) more instruments. I don't mean to be harsh; it's just that the freaky clown melody's getting to me.

ThisIsAnEmergency responds:

Thank you, and yea almost all of my beats are made to rap on. So I'd like to hear any version in-which a rapper fills the void.

[Slow Motion (Instr)]

Normally, I get extremely annoyed when DJs/producers plaster their tag all over their beats to the point it's impossible to listen to the beat, but when I heard "this is an emergency" and checked your username, it screamed clever. I lol'd. As for the beat, at 1:01 I really enjoyed the low-freq drone of the kick. It helped fill the otherwise empty drum beat. I think there could've been more instruments, though. I mean, there was the bassline, but it was only three notes. I really thought there would be more to the track, and I think you can really go places with this. I was kinda bummed when I found out it was just drums and bass. Well, that's my two cents. Keep up the nice work.

ThisIsAnEmergency responds:

Thanks, I made it as a really quick club song and I'll take your valid points into consideration throughout my other beats.

[[Crysis] La Skate]

I agree with SenatorJohnDean on the guitar, but I don't think your intention was to have rappers on the track, judging by the way the drums sound. With the drums turned down and in the background, it does sound like the menu music to a skateboarding game or something. Not that that's a bad thing. It actually sounds pretty cool. I like the reverse drum intro a lot. Whole thing screams 90s.

JackRocker responds:

Thanks a lot dude! Actually, I do plan on fixing to guitar issue a little, and maybe making some other tweaks here and there. I'd like to have a rapper on it, but until the Portal is fully functional and I can edit current submissions again, I can't upload the remastered version anyway..I don't want to have multiple edits of the same submission cluttering up my page.

Glad you liked it, and thanks a lot for the review!

[[OS] Restraint]

This sounds like something Sufjan Stevens would sing on top of. I like the plodding raindrop-like rhythm to it. I forgot which word there is for that - rubato or fermata? You use great rubato. It's cool that you record yourself playing the music too - most people would just plug the notes into a MIDI file and have a robot piano play it, in which case it would sound good, but not quite like this. Nice work.

ObsidianSnow responds:

Rubato is the word you're looking for, I think. It refers to what's essentially a bend in the tempo for expressive purposes, and I do a lot of that in my playing. Fermata is just a long hold on a note, where the length is arbitrary.

I definitely prefer the sound of real playing, too.

Thanks for the review!

[[OS] Hold]

Really liked the chord change at 1:21. The children in the background is a nice touch. You have great dynamics when playing. I liked the oscillations from loud to soft and vice versa. I could definitely see this working for film.

ObsidianSnow responds:

I like that change, too - starts in the Em scale on the i, then to the IV, then shifts into what I think was GMaj followed by a BbMaj chord. I'm not 100% sure on that, though. I'd have to check the file to be certain.

Thanks for the review!

[J@K's Tribute]

Way cool. You guitar's got great tone. I think it could use a bit of EQ. With guitars there's this spot between 2 and 4 kHz that can make the guitar sound really grating. Peeling back the frequencies in there would make the guitar sound a lot better. I really dig the chord progression at 1:21. Great chords in there.

gamejunkie responds:

Thank You for your great input, much appreciated.

Cheers gamejunkie.